salut,
vous savez, il y a pas longtemps l'Avgn avait ouvert une boite mail pour ses fan, alors j'ai pensait lui écrire.
j'aimerais que quelqu’un m'aide a corriger ce texte.
merci

Citation :

Dear James,
I'm 15 and I live in France. I'm sorry for my bad English.
I love your videos, not long ago I read about you in a site.
I was already fascinated by the RetroGame but I was afraid to talk to another of my passion.
I thought maybe he go find me crazy (seen everyone played with psp, nds ...).
One day, by going to the site cinemassacre.com, I saw a video: The Dragon in my dreams.
it was surprising that Would somebody had shared his childhood memories with his fans!
this episode made ​​me cry .....
bit of time after, using GoTube (application for psp to go on youtube) ,I saw cinemassacre'' 2000''. amazing ..................
I decide to no longer hide my passion for RetroGame.
two months after, I heard about the junior association (for under 18).
I'd decide I wanted to create an association in the junior RetroGame: RetroGame Zone!!
after two months of work I finally achieved my dream .........
Now there are 7 members, that I have discovered by asking a registration form atschool.
We have a blog and a forum:
blog:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/
forum:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/forum/
We Have a N64,a SNES , a Game Boy and Game Cube but soo hard to find some nice stuffs!
Can you give us advices for our junior assocition and how to make a good video?
We wants to follow your trail!!
Do you have any consoles or games for sale?
I wish I had an autograph!
I hope your movie going to be beautiful.
Thank you for your attention and I hope you will answer me.
thank you very much.



By TrolledMomo

Shadowmomo a écrit:

salut,
vous savez, il y a pas longtemps l'Avgn avait ouvert une boite mail pour ses fans, alors j'ai pensé lui écrire.
j'aimerais que quelqu’un m'aide à corriger ce texte.
merci

Citation :

Dear James,
I'm 15 and I live in France. I'm sorry for my bad English.
I love your videos, not long ago I read about you in a site.
I was already fascinated by the RetroGame but I was afraid to talk to another of my passion.
I thought maybe he go find me crazy (seen everyone played with psp, nds ...).
One day, by going to the site cinemassacre.com, I saw a video: The Dragon in my dreams.
it was surprising that Would somebody had shared his childhood memories with his fans!
this episode made ​​me cry .....
bit of time after, using GoTube (application for psp to go on youtube) ,I saw cinemassacre'' 2000''. amazing ..................
I decide to no longer hide my passion for RetroGame.
two months after, I heard about the junior association (for under 18).
I'd decide I wanted to create an association in the junior RetroGame: RetroGame Zone!!
after two months of work I finally achieved my dream .........
Now there are 7 members, that I have discovered by asking a registration form at school.
We have a blog and a forum:
blog:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/
forum:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/forum/
We Have a N64,a SNES , a Game Boy and Game Cube but soo hard to find some nice stuffs!
Can you give us advice for our junior association and how to make good videos?
We want to follow your trail!!
Do you have any consoles or games for sale?
I wish I had an autograph!
I hope your movie going to be beautiful.
Thank you for your attention and I hope you will answer me.
thank you very much.



By TrolledMomo

je pense que comme ça, ça ira mieux.

Citation :

Dear James,
I'm 15 and I live in France. I'm sorry for my bad English.
I love your videos, not long ago I read about you in a site.
I was already fascinated by the RetroGame but I was afraid to talk to another of my passion.
I thought maybe he go find me crazy (seen everyone played with psp, nds ...).
One day, by going to the site cinemassacre.com, I saw a video: The Dragon in my dreams.
it was surprising that Would somebody had shared his childhood memories with his fans!
this episode made ​​me cry .....
bit of time after, using GoTube (application for psp to go on youtube) ,I saw cinemassacre'' 2000''. amazing ..................
I decide to no longer hide my passion for RetroGame.
two months after, I heard about the junior association (for under 18).
I'd decide I wanted to create an association in the junior RetroGame: RetroGame Zone!!
after two months of work I finally achieved my dream .........
Now there are 7 members, that I have discovered by asking a registration form at school.
We have a blog and a forum:
blog:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/
forum:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/forum/
We Have a N64,a SNES , a Game Boy and Game Cube but soo hard to find some nice stuffs!
Can you give us advice for our junior association and how to make good videos?
We want to follow your trail!!
Do you have any consoles or games for sale?
I wish I had an autograph!
I hope your movie going to be beautiful.
Thank you for your attention and I hope you will answer me.
thank you very much.

Dear James,
I'm 15 and I live in France. I'm sorry for my bad English.
I love your videos, not long ago I read about you in a site.
I was already fascinated by the RetroGameretrogaming but I was afraid to talk to another of my passion.
I thought maybe he gowould find me crazy (seen everyone played with psp, nds ...).
One day, by going to the site cinemassacre.com, I saw a video: The Dragon in my dreams.
it was surprising that Would somebody would hadve shared his childhood memories with his fans!
this episode made ​​me cry .....
bit of time after,Later, using GoTube (application for psp to go on youtube) ,I saw cinemassacre'' 2000''. amazing ..................
I decide to no longer hide my passion for RetroGameretrogaming.
two months after, I heard about the junior association (for under 18).
I'd decided I wanted to create an association in the junior RetroGameretrogaming : RetroGame Zone!!
after two months of work I finally achieved my dream .........
Now there are 7 members, that I have discovered by asking a registration form at school.
We have a blog and a forum:
blog:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/
forum:http://retro-gz.1s.fr/forum/
We Have a N64, a SNES, a Game Boy and a Game Cube but soo hard to find some nice stuffs!
CanCould you give us advices for our junior association and how to make good videos?
We want to follow your trail!!
Do you have any consoles or games for sale?
I wish I had an autograph!
I hope your movie going to be beautiful.*
Thank you for your attention and, I hope you will answer me.
thank you very much.

Je pense que c'est encore mieux.

Par contre j'ai un peu du mal avec ta phrase en orange.
Elle voudrait dire "Je souhaite que votre film va être très beau"... un peu torturé.
Tu devrais plutôt dire que tu espère que leur prochain film soit très beau : "I hope your next film to be beautiful", non ?

Bonne chance.

Merci beaucoup!!!!

merci tatouille de paufiner la correction.
je parle trop anglais sans faire gaffe à la grammaire